句子潤色用高級結(jié)構(gòu)讓句子靚起來

1、句子潤色：,用高級結(jié)構(gòu)讓句子 靚起來,,教學(xué)目標(biāo)：1.用高級結(jié)構(gòu)為作文提檔升級 2.活學(xué)活用，能夠在情境中實(shí)際 運(yùn)用所學(xué)知識。,第二節(jié)書面表達(dá)（滿分25分）假定你是李華，與留學(xué)生朋友Bob約好一起去書店，因故不能赴約。請給他寫封郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1.表示歉意；2.說明原因；3.另約時間。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。,2016年全國卷3,Dear Bob, I’m L

2、i Hua. Yesterday we agreed to go to the bookstore together on Saturday but I want to tell you that I cannot go to the bookstore with you, because I have something important. I know I should keep my promise. I am very sor

3、ry about that. I hope you can understand me. Shall we go on Sunday morning? I suggest we should start early. In this way we can have more time to read and select books. If you agree, let’s meet at 8:30 outside the sc

4、hool gate. You can also choose the time to go to the bookstore if you have a plan. I will be free any time after school next week. Yours

5、 Li Hua,整篇作文缺少高級詞匯、短語。句式單調(diào)，缺乏多樣性，簡單句的大量運(yùn)用給人記流水賬的感覺。,遣詞造句過于平淡，敘述理由不夠真誠，含糊不清以我為主體，沒有顧及他人的感受。,正文第一段結(jié)尾結(jié)構(gòu)松散，不夠緊湊，上下文缺乏巧妙連接，表達(dá)過于口語化。部分句子不符合英式表達(dá)，如＂I hope you can understand me.＂完全是漢語思維的產(chǎn)物。,綜上可知，語

6、言平淡、中式英語思維、上下文缺乏連貫性是制約考生取得高分的關(guān)鍵因素。,策略1：特殊句式 風(fēng)景獨(dú)好,1 使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句:用do, does, did強(qiáng)調(diào)一般時態(tài)的謂語動詞; 用it is ...that ...強(qiáng)調(diào)謂語之外的各種句子成分。Those who like reading extensively say we get our knowledge through reading.,,,Those who like reading e

7、xtensively say it is through reading that we get our knowledge.,Those who like reading extensively say we do get our knowledge through reading.,舉一反三,您給了我們很多的知識和快樂！(梅二檢),,It is you who/that give us so much knowledge and h

8、appiness.,You do give us so much knowledge and happiness.,It is your unreserved(無保留的） help that enables me to obtain this splendid（極好的）opportunity of further education.,2 使用倒裝句,The library is to the east of the teac

9、hing building.,,To the east of the teaching building is the library.,只有用這種方法我們才可以學(xué)好英語。,,Only in this way can we learn English well.,我不僅取得了好成績，而且交到了很多好朋友。（梅一檢）,舉一反三,Not only have I obtained the excellent academic perform

10、ance, but also I have made lots of good friends,3使用虛擬語氣,Obviously, it’s high time for us to take some measures to solve the problem.,,Obviously, it’s high time that we took some measures to solve the problem,We have done

11、 the work well with your help.,,Without/ but for your help, We could not have done the work well with your help.,I can’t imagine what I would be like without them.,4使用with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu):介詞with+賓語后接非謂語（動名詞、現(xiàn)在分詞、不定式、過去分詞）、名詞、形容詞、副詞

12、并構(gòu)成邏輯上主謂關(guān)系的結(jié)構(gòu)。,with the technology developing , the human living environment has become worse and worse,,由于有個重要的會要參加，我不能和你一起去書店了。,With an important meeting to attend, I cannot go to the bookstore with you.,,5使用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu),Wea

13、ther permitting, we will have a picnic tomorrow.,My mother being ill, I have to take care of her now.,我的媽媽生病了，我必須照顧她。,,策略2：活用非謂語，句句精彩,1運(yùn)用非謂語動詞整合簡單句，提升表達(dá)檔次,（1）I have a good command of English. (2) It makes it easy for m

14、e to communicate with native speakers of English.,,,I have a good command of English, making it easy for me to communicate with native speakers of English.,舉一反三,In this picture, a mother bird stays in her nest in a bi

15、g tree. she watches her babies flying away.,,In this picture, a mother bird stays in her nest in a big tree, watching her babies flying away.,All the people here like the novel. It is written by Tom.,,,All the people he

16、re like the novel written by Tom.,2運(yùn)用非謂語動詞簡化復(fù)合句，使語言簡練,If you want to travel around the downtown area, you’d better hire a street bike.,,Wanting to travel around the downtown area, you’d better hire a street bike.,After t

17、hey visited the lab, the visitors went to the library.,,Having visited the lab, the visitors went to the library,策略3 使用諺語，畫龍點(diǎn)睛,諺語的準(zhǔn)確使用也可以為文章增色。,策略4 運(yùn)用從句， 豐富內(nèi)涵,通過合并意義相關(guān)的幾個句子，用一定的連接方式連接起來，或通過緊湊，去掉一些多余的成分，避免冗長累贅、松散無力，使句子凝

18、練，層次清晰。例如：Some students are interested in the activity. They are welcome to take part.,,,Students who are interested in the activity are welcome to take part.,背熟這10篇優(yōu)秀范文，2017高考英語寫作輕松得20+,That is owing to（因?yàn)椋?#160;the f

19、act that （同位語從句）my younger brother suddenly fell ill and was taken to a hospital thismorning.  (2 道歉信),Besides, the success stories of world-famous people are also attractive to me, which help me learn a lot from th

20、em.  （6建議信）,I keep wondering how you feel about your school life in Beijing. （7求助信）,第二節(jié)書面表達(dá)（滿分25分）假定你是李華，與留學(xué)生朋友Bob約好一起去書店，因故不能赴約。請給他寫封郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1.表示歉意；2.說明原因；3.另約時間。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。,2016年全國卷3,Dea

21、r Bob, I’m Li Hua. Yesterday we agreed to go to the bookstore together on Saturday but I want to tell you that I cannot go to the bookstore with you, because I have something important. I know I should keep my pro

22、mise. I am very sorry about that. I hope you can understand me. Shall we go on Sunday morning? I suggest we should start early. In this way we can have more time to read and select books. If you agree, let’s meet at

23、8:30 outside the school gate. You can also choose the time to go to the bookstore if you have a plan. I will be free any time after school next week. Yours